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Is it true? by ~critical-condition:iconcritical-condition:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Open


Two maggots.

Devouring the remains
of what once was
human
?

In the warm grasp
of the body
they now call
'home'

Vultures retrieve
their share
a portion
while

The widow at home
cries for her children
their daddy
gone
without a trace.

'what shall we have for dinner tonight?'

Thousands of maggots
Yet these two
share
love.

And in some peculiar
maggot-mating
or something
these two
are
no longer maggots.
They become

human
a role reversal.
I will not say

beautiful.
©2007-2008 ~critical-condition
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I know, it sucks.

But I'm keeping it; rebelling against all that is good.

~emotions: 22/4/07

NB. I don't know how maggots mate. I dont particularly care....it was figurative...and I hate the little buggers.
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*ThornyEnglishRose:iconThornyEnglishRose: Apr 22, 2007, 5:17:18 AM
Lovely opening - the maggot metaphor is wonderful. I think the way you isolate the word 'gone' is really effective. You misspelt 'peculiar' - if you fix that, it will be a consistently good piece.
*ghost28:iconghost28: Apr 22, 2007, 6:03:39 AM
maggots don't mate .....they're the larvae of flies which do mate

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~mimonol:iconmimonol: Apr 22, 2007, 9:00:09 AM
I like it, I think this is the first dark poem of yours I've seen
~Piuri-extract:iconPiuri-extract: Apr 22, 2007, 12:53:24 PM
How gruesome! :D keep on writting. By the way I'm curious, what usually inspires you to write?

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~critical-condition:iconcritical-condition: Apr 23, 2007, 8:48:57 AM
:lol: I can't spell....but thank you for the spelling, and the comment :hug:

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be yourself
everyone else is already taken.
~critical-condition:iconcritical-condition: Apr 23, 2007, 8:49:06 AM
...bothered?

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be yourself
everyone else is already taken.
~critical-condition:iconcritical-condition: Apr 23, 2007, 8:50:13 AM
:D I used to write loads of darker stuff....but then I stopped...and when I wrote this I was in such a bad mood, it was untrue. Anyway, thanks for reading and for the comment too :hug:

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be yourself
everyone else is already taken.
~critical-condition:iconcritical-condition: Apr 23, 2007, 8:53:10 AM
Hehehe, yup...well, Im not gonna stop

Inspiration usually comes from 2 sources: things that have happened to me, usually emotions, or places Ive been. The other one is a whole 'what if' scenario, which links in to number one source...emotions for example. 'What if they were related?'

But mainly, its my deranged mind...just spews rendom stuff at me....

:hug:

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*ghost28:iconghost28: Apr 23, 2007, 9:16:21 AM
obviously not :rofl:

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